As noted in the last blog post, Assignment 1 is split into two parts: drafting a PDF for reviewers, and sending it off for feedback. In between these two parts is the tutor feedback and suggestions, detailed in that post just linked above.
I have been working on editing down and re-laying out the original draft which was, I now realise, overlong and a tad dry and dull visually (my words, not my tutor’s, I hasten to add).
The original draft was 20 pages long:
- Title page
- Text intro (about me / about the work)
- Blank divider page
- 15x individual full-page images
- Blank divider page
- Photography CV
The new version is, as suggested by tutor Garry, punchier and more magazine-y in its layout. It is six pages in total and features eight out of the 15 images, plus links to the website for the full series.
A few notes on layout:
- I found some good templates built into the latest version of Pages, the Mac OS word processor / desktop publisher
- I chose landscape ratio not portrait to better suit the image ratio
- I used a full-bleed cover image without the border / text fragment as I felt that the text lines could cause confusion in this context
- I wanted a contemporary look and feel / typography
- The original template was pure white but I tweaked the background to a 20% opacity grey so that the white images would stand out without needing a key line around them
- I wanted a variety of page layouts as the lack of variety was one of the reasons the earlier version was a bit dull
For the purposes of this blog post, as it’s only six pages I’ve included them as images here rather than making it a downloadable document.
I did a draft prior to this one and shared with some peer students. This was, as ever, very useful; people always come up with comments that make me see my work in a new light, and suggest things to try that I might not have considered. I had originally used a different cover image, for example, and a couple of people suggested that it wasn’t the strongest or most representative image. So I mocked up a few alternatives for feedback:
A few people preferred the middle one, and with hindsight I think the colour palette suits the tone of the overall set more than the bright blue sky did.
I also had feedback on specific wording, placement of images on the page and the repetition of gloves (of course!)
The final version here had two images replaced and a couple of images swapping places.
I believe I have succeeded in overcoming the comment from Garry that stuck with me the most – that it shouldn’t look too much like a college assignment 😁