Following specific feedback from the LensCulture critique, I have mocked up some variations on how to handle the text fragment,ents juxtaposed with each photograph.

The feedback was as follows:

“Perhaps you could go for a thinner font (not bold) that mimics a classic typewriter. And you might consider going with smallcaps for the entire sentence or perhaps no caps at all (i.e. don’t capitalize names, etc.)”

I have mocked up a range of alternatives based on these comments.

At the moment I confess I still prefer the original! With the thinner variation of the same font (2) as a close second. The all caps / small caps look odd to my eyes, and the lower case one seems to make a small change without any real purpose. The old type one is too grungy for my liking.

I am however always interested in the thoughts of others!