Following specific feedback from the LensCulture critique, I have mocked up some variations on how to handle the text fragment,ents juxtaposed with each photograph.
The feedback was as follows:
“Perhaps you could go for a thinner font (not bold) that mimics a classic typewriter. And you might consider going with smallcaps for the entire sentence or perhaps no caps at all (i.e. don’t capitalize names, etc.)”
I have mocked up a range of alternatives based on these comments.
At the moment I confess I still prefer the original! With the thinner variation of the same font (2) as a close second. The all caps / small caps look odd to my eyes, and the lower case one seems to make a small change without any real purpose. The old type one is too grungy for my liking.
I am however always interested in the thoughts of others!
Rob Townsend 
I agree Rob the original still works. The thinner version is also good followed by the old typewriter but this could also be a bit cliche? Did you try actual writing?
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I did try handwriting, way back in Body of Work, but it really didn’t work for me. I’m happy with typewritten text. And I’m leaning towards the thinner variant too. Thanks!
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I agree with Lens Culture – thinner, not bold. Implies the ‘everyday’ occurrences. Whereas in contrast the original shouts a bit? But not to the point that I find it deafening! Jane’s idea of handwritten is interesting and probably worth testing. 😄
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Yeah I’m leaning towards the thinner. Cheers.
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Agree – original, then thinner. All caps/lower case doesn’t really work. Have you tried Garamond font?
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Funnily enough, I did use Garamond for a while! But switched to Athelas. They are very similar but something about Athelas edged it, can’t really put my finger on it…
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My selection would be thinner then original. For the rest agree with the above comments. I did look at the a few times yesterday but always come back to the top two. In terms of handwritten, you may need to find somebody that has an appealing handwriting, I certainly would as mine is awful. However, maybe as a result of seeing it for so long, I would probably still stick with the typed.
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